| 2021-02-13 23:56:07 |
Pregnant Daughter
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well I'd say needs work. felt like one of those times you walk into the middle of a conversation and no idea what got them to that point. Good attempt though. got potential |
| 2021-02-07 16:52:20 |
Being Human - part 1
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I like it. well written and has a nice flow. Minus the technical computer stuff. I think there was a flaw in the Brian/Leah section but perhaps that was missed by me or intentional. I will try to look for the next segment. |
| 2021-02-07 14:55:26 |
Tinder for Teacher 2
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A+ for the story. read both chapters and I'm not really getting into it. |
| 2021-02-07 14:30:22 |
A Good Deed
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It is amusing and somewhat entertaining but I find it slightly lacking. I get a feeling this story chapter was rushed and it could use some polish. |
| 2021-02-07 14:09:24 |
Not Of This World
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admittedly not my type of story but tried to read it anyway. one never knows. But this needs lots of work. to hard to read. repetitive and jumps to fast. needs more story line. and a good proof read |