| 2008-12-02 00:44:10 |
Harry Potter and the Sisters Black - The Complete Saga PART TWO
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I have read both parts and have to say that I love the story but.... there are lots of spelling and grammar errors and you slip up on names here and there. Doug Granger turns into Dave Granger... Fix the flaws and its a 10/10 story... Keep writing |
| 2009-03-17 22:23:59 |
Learning the Lifestyle Part 2.5
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Ozzie.... First off it isn't a true story and second I don't have a pud to pull as I am a girl.. But hey you don't like my story... I get that... Thanks anyway... |
| 2009-08-31 15:26:09 |
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Great story. Love so see where it leads. Do I detect a Domme side to her friend? |
| 2009-08-31 15:43:05 |
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Great story. Love so see where it leads. Do I detect a Domme side to her friend? |
| 2009-09-19 16:21:12 |
Reading Allowed, Pt.1
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Yes its not Anne Rice whose name is on The Sleeping Beauty Series but that's a minor flaw. You should space your paragraphs also. Runs together too much, hard to read. Also the title. Reading Allowed? That means she's allowed to read, I think you mean Reading Out Loud... Tell me if I am wrong... Good Story |