| 2011-01-19 06:41:57 |
Grandma and granson
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You write, but not well. Take a writing course, is my advice. It could have been a good story, but it failed. |
| 2011-01-25 01:26:50 |
Experimenting with my best friend
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Please use paragraphs. It's hard to read one sentence. |
| 2011-01-25 01:27:08 |
Experimenting with my best friend
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Please use paragraphs. It's hard to read one sentence. |
| 2011-05-25 05:48:08 |
kirsty and mum
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@ Anonymous reader 20-05-25 00:18:11- Before you start "throwing stones", fix your comment first. @ kasbah982-Very good story. Is there a Part 2? |