| 2010-06-01 06:55:30 |
Wizards of Waverly Place: Episode 2
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Great story going! Now if you got the hot mom going catching them in the act and wants in who knows where you can go with this? Maybe Dad at the same time? |
| 2010-06-01 06:59:10 |
Wizards of Waverly Place: Episode 2
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Also I agree with the others make it a longer stroy! A little more plot and about the same on the sex. |
| 2010-06-02 05:29:30 |
Me and My Cousin_(11)
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Not bad for the first time. But you may want to write a bit longer stories. Just remember wam bam thank you mam maybe good but it will not get back readers. |
| 2010-06-02 05:45:31 |
Family Therapy III
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Come on Darklord! You have a GREAT series going on don't waste it with short stories! I have read a lot of your stories but they are so short with no plot. You have it in you to do better. You have the talent! |
| 2010-07-14 06:18:49 |
Dad and the neighbors
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I BARELY GIVE YOU A POSTIVE RATING. THE ONLY THING THAT YOU HAVE GOING ON IT IS A HOT STORY AND HAS A LOT OF PROPECT TO MAKE IT HOTTER. PLEASE NO MORE WHAM BAHM MAM STORIES. GET A BIT MORE STORY AND SEX INTO IT. BY THE WAY I DO LIVE IN THE PHONIEX AREA. |