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Comments from Wounded Wolf
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2010-04-17 02:01:48 | Jans mum found out - I was in trouble - I thought. | The story line has real potential but the actual writing is very choppy and annoying. Using "she said" and "I said" time after time is very distracting. There are specific rules/guidelines for presenting dialogue in text. I'm sure they should be easy to hunt down on the internet and incorporate into your writing. Overall, I enjoyed the premise. Keep writing. |
| 2016-05-12 18:07:27 | A New Beginning: Chapter 1_(2) | Great start to what I hope will be an ongoing story. Enjoyed the characters, I thought you put those characters in an interesting venue, and stopped at just the right point to tease readers into guessing what direction you will go from here. I'm hanging on until the next chapter shows up nd hoping it will be SOON! |