| 2011-02-27 12:21:50 |
My Three Ladies
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loved the story continue please. would love to know more about this story. |
| 2014-05-22 20:04:26 |
All Female Apartment Complex
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Very good story so far keep it going. |
| 2012-07-07 09:01:34 |
Charles Helps His Mother Feel Pleasure Again Chapter 2
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Can't wait for next part. Very good story. |
| 2013-09-30 13:09:42 |
The Ticket
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Great story so far can't wait for the next part. 1 guy and up to 21 women where can I get a living like that? |
| 2015-01-15 20:30:29 |
Just Your Average Story_(1)
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The story is good for a first try. Like some of the others here you need punctuation to make it easy to read. Fix your timeline, if you are going to use big time items like the Greek Gods, or the crusades make sure that time passes correctly. You need description on your characters and places. Slow down on your story telling, its not a race to finish fast, take your time to tell us whats going on. |