| 2013-07-29 04:45:56 |
Going for it
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Nice story. However, if you put a gap between paragraphs, it would be an easier read. |
| 2013-07-29 04:45:59 |
Going for it
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Nice story. However, if you put a gap between paragraphs, it would be an easier read. |
| 2013-07-29 04:53:13 |
Kelsey - "No Dad. STOP"
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As the other comments have said, this story has great potential, but the writing is poor. Negative rating. |
| 2013-07-29 04:59:35 |
Kelsey - "Dad THAT cannot happen again."
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Such great potential... So sad. Still, it got me wet. Maybe send out revised versions that are easier to read.... |