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Comments from ShakeZula
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2009-06-13 05:38:16 | James School, The Beggining | This might be a good story but because of the horrible grammar, I didn't last two minutes. Spell check and editor. |
| 2010-06-28 01:17:10 | The Amulet part 2 | This story doesn't go anywhere. Just one fuck scene after the other. What's the point? |
| 2012-10-24 23:52:56 | My homeless stepdaughter Part 1 | Don't switch from 1st person to 3rd person mid-story like that, it's jarring. Just stay with 3rd. |