| 2016-12-28 14:36:59 |
Family Affairs (Niki and Olivia) (Ch.6)
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I was very touched with the way you started this chapter. So much so that in the first part of it I felt the emotion of him meeting his daughter for the first time and it touched my heart and tears filled my eyes. I had to stop and wait to pull myself together before I could finish the story. Please add more to this story and draw it out as much as you can. Truly a great read. |
| 2017-03-24 11:08:57 |
The Cheerleader Harem: Part 10
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Not bad. Would've better if she had gotten spanked for what she did to the guy, by lifting his keys. |
| 2017-02-15 07:23:37 |
Family Affairs (Rachel) rev.1 (Ch.1)
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Vyper269 why not just put them on storiesonline.net that way your stories can be seen more often. Would enjoy reading them on there more without the eye strain as on here. |