| 2018-06-24 01:45:48 |
Rent For Pleasure
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You should not list themes that don't fit the story. You're going to get negative ratings for wasting people's time. Also, this guy doesn't sound straight. I like the story concept, but you might try writing one where the rich roommate insists on sex or eviction. And the guy does what he has to do. You could take it a step further by having the rich guy whore him out to his friends. Or not. Your story. Just don't make people think it's about things that are not in the story, and your ratings will be better. I'm posting this instead of a negative rating, because I think this will be more helpful. |
| 2018-07-01 08:05:09 |
James and I - Part 1
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You have good potential as a writer. The sex was abrupt, and the end was difficult to believe and took me out of the story. I have trouble accepting that if your crush said he loved you, you would just go to sleep. That said, I encourage you to keep writing. It gets better with practice, and your confidence will improve. |
| 2018-07-06 02:11:24 |
Hell House
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An2772, Thanks! I'm already working on chapter 2. In the meantime, if you click on my name at the start of the story, you will get a list of all my stories. Let me know what you think! |
| 2018-09-18 02:02:55 |
Rite of Passage Ch.01
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I've already read through Chapter 4. I'm normally not attracted to the transgender element, but you make it really accessable. I love power sex stories like this that are written by women. There's so much us men don't get! |
| 2018-09-20 06:53:25 |
Neck Deep Ch.03
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Well done! I was afraid they might go soft on him. So to speak. I love the way you changed that up! |