2018-06-13 03:28:48 |
Reunion_(0)
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Wasn’t as long as I had hoped. If you’re gonna make a continuation, make it longer. Much, much longer than this. I need a good, long read. This went by really quickly, and escalated very quickly. I suggest moving at a slower pace, bring in more story, more details, with less spelling and grammatical errors. Don’t make it too slow, but slow enough. For example, describing the characters more; describing where they live—what the town looked like (at a quick pace, just a few details), what their location looks like, etc. More deions, more story, move slower, and make it longer. Those are my suggestions and I hope the next one can keep me hooked for a long read. Keep it up my doggie. |