| 2021-01-28 19:06:40 |
Step-daughter explores her sexuality Ch. 1 & 2
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Changing POV is confusing. And Chapter Two is top short |
| 2021-03-06 15:38:30 |
Seven and Bella
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Poorly written. Too much dialog; too little exposition. |
| 2021-03-06 15:34:25 |
What Hides in Lexi's Silence
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Once again, "too much votes". Awkward expression. |
| 2021-03-06 15:35:27 |
What Hides in Lexi's Silence
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Once again, "too much votes". Awkward expression. |
| 2021-04-09 19:46:01 |
Crystal, My new neighbor!
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Well written if this is really your first. |