| 2020-07-20 16:02:46 |
Hiding Sandy Part 1
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That was a great story! You have room to improve with your Grammer and writing style. You mixed up the names of Mike and Steve quite often along with mixing up "him" and "her". Great concept though. Just slow down and feel free to set the scene more. I can't wait to read the rest. :) |
| 2020-07-20 17:05:01 |
Hiding Sandy Part 2
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This story was again great! You corrected alot of your grammatical errors. However you could really do with fleshing out more of your characters. There is still alot of really dramatic scene changes in your plot. |
| 2020-07-20 17:50:14 |
Hiding Sandy Part 3
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This one was even better. Great work! |
| 2020-07-20 18:02:46 |
Hiding Sandy Part 4
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Great work! |
| 2020-08-28 16:44:07 |
Twins Equal Twice The Payback
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Love it! Great writing. And I always appreciate stories delving to the depth of sadism. Can't wait to read more! |