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Comments from Crangasi
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2021-06-17 16:20:18 | The Paperboy_(1) | A nice story. A few edits needed, which is a bit strange for someone who claims to teach journalism. Please put quote around "spoken words" Please be consistent with past tense - some sentences have both past & present. is the boy 'Sam' or 'sam'? a medium sized town ___ a medium-sized town as I peaked through __ peeked I dont know __ don't since youre growing ___ you're These too, I questioned __ maybe you meant This too Sam was rything with ___ writhing and burried his head __ burrowed ? buried? I screamed like a banchi. --- banshee After we disembraced, ___ I think I know what you mean, but no such word. I wrote a lot here, but you claim to be ... |
| 2021-06-17 16:34:23 | Serena_(0) | nice story, but it moves along very quickly. You really to get an editor, and also do spell checking. |
| 2021-06-18 19:56:27 | My Tempting Daughter | Wowsy, I just loved this fantasy, and the games being played. |
| 2021-06-18 20:18:32 | Camping With Daddy | nice story, a rather simple plot but fun. hot cum deep 8nto ... typo |
| 2022-07-17 12:06:07 | Bee Stings | A beautiful story, and very well written. Thx |