| 2021-05-21 00:15:45 |
Broken Little Thing: Chapter 1
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I submitted it again. It will be on soon as the website releases new stories. Sorry about that. |
| 2021-06-02 10:06:56 |
The T-Shirt Said "No!"
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Can I offer some advice? This would be a way better story if you included more of the girl's reactions, her actions, some lines, etc. Other than that, good writing. |
| 2021-06-02 10:07:11 |
The T-Shirt Said "No!"
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Can I offer some advice? This would be a way better story if you included more of the girl's reactions, her actions, some lines, etc. Other than that, good writing. |
| 2021-08-23 20:12:29 |
Little Girl in the Red Hood (edited)
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Loved it! |
| 2021-08-31 12:47:18 |
Unlucky Cameron
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Agree with WriterNox. Awesome work, but more depth and length to the scenes would make for a better story. I'd also add more verbal reactions to the girl. Other than that, very enjoyable. |