| 2008-08-09 10:44:37 |
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Nice to read of gentle pleasuring like this even if it is "illegal". Given that there are three 'assorted' women for him I think you missed an oportunity for hotter and more intense sex. Presumably there's more to come ... I look forwrd to that. Perhaps introduce an element of competition between the three 'girls'. Julius |
| 2008-08-09 21:27:23 |
SECRETS THAT A MOTHER AND SON KEEP
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Scraping the semen off into a film container - I quit right there! This woman needs a hobby .................. Julius |
| 2008-08-10 07:45:02 |
The Club pt 1 - Mary's Initiation
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This story needs more attention to spelling. The sex acts between Kevin and Mary were too casually described. The author seemed almost bored. Although the plot is good and well thought out, there is a lack of passion about this story. Erotic writing is intended (I hope) to arouse the reader, this story doesn't. |
| 2008-08-22 06:07:39 |
The Tenants, Chapters 17, 18, 19
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Great erotica .... but, (for me) the excrement is one step too far, moving from sexy to just plain dirty. Sorry but this pervert does have limits. Julius |