| 2008-10-27 18:16:39 |
|
Really, *really* enjoyed this story although I am not one for the whole watersports thing. Also wasn't interested so much in the kids other than Cameron, but that's just probably my gayness speaking. It just seemed like the other kids weren't necessary to keep the story interesting or hot. I also didn't think Cameron, at least, was too knowledgeable. He came off to me as innocent, but then I was a pretty messed up kid. |
| 2008-10-27 18:19:12 |
Getting to Know Sean
|
Oh, one thing I did notice was you wrote "stale" several times when you should have had "stall." Just letting you know for future reference since it was repeated. (the first comment is mine) |
| 2008-10-27 20:15:32 |
Close Your Eyes Little Girly Boy
|
Darling, best climax in the story or for you? Writing what you know tends to work best even though I'm an avid encourager of new ideas. Anyway, proud to please. |
| 2008-10-27 21:55:59 |
My Life as a Slave 2
|
Very well written, like reading published erotica. So refreshing and arousing! |
| 2008-10-28 17:54:18 |
Close Your Eyes Little Girly Boy
|
Sure! |