| 2009-06-17 00:13:43 |
Kumiko - Part 1: Snowed In_(0)
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very good story so far my only thoughts were first you said she was wearing tight sweat pants that hugged her ass. then you said she was wearing jeans. other than that it is an awesome story and i cant wait to read part 2. keep writing man your a natural. |
| 2009-06-17 00:45:50 |
Kumiko - Part 3: Midnight Snack_(1)
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great stories keep the coming please. |
| 2009-06-19 00:40:31 |
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GOD I HATE WHEN I SEE THAT THIN YELLOW LINE.MAN I WISH THIS STORY WAS NEVER ENDING. KEEP IT UP BRO. |
| 2009-06-20 01:28:38 |
A little more then just release...
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Not bad but try to lengthen it and give more detail and storyline. Keep it up u will be a pro soon enough awesome vocab skills btw |
| 2009-06-20 01:50:20 |
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Very good and alot of detail too great job!!! |