sexstories.com
Comments from Pwny
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-07-08 11:47:32 | My sister Ashley chapter 10 | hey Von just an idea. if u are able to write some more parts of the sereis, i am just thinking, that a good ending might be a flash into the future and show what happened to the whole bunch like how did both the relationships w/ ashley and oriana work out, and so on. but, basically as a look of what happened to future, adult tim and maybe have an ending like he cathes his kid fucking, have auntie ashely come visit alot. and toward the ending maybe have ashely speak for the both of them thinking she is doing the right thing by exsposing the relationship that she and tim have. but these are all opinion. o and i thnk a conflict between sarah and ashely or oriana would be nice, but thats just me. |
| 2008-07-08 16:30:46 | Me and Jacqui (The 1st Time) | good but need more detail |
| 2008-07-08 16:45:56 | MSA Omnibus (1-10) | hey Von just an idea. if u are able to write some more parts of the sereis, i am just thinking, that a good ending might be a flash into the future and show what happened to the whole bunch like how did both the relationships w/ ashley and oriana work out, and so on. but, basically as a look of what happened to future, adult tim and maybe have an ending like he cathes his kid fucking, have auntie ashely come visit alot. and toward the ending maybe have ashely speak for the both of them thinking she is doing the right thing by exsposing the relationship that she and tim have to their parents. maybe have some close calls on campus, ashely brings her new lady or borfriend home, have tim and oriana try to leave to go on a little weekend get away that gets interupted. just throwing out ideas but these are all opinion. o and i thnk a conflict between sarah and ashely, oriana, tish, or whoever just to back with tim would be nice, but thats just me. |
| 2008-07-11 11:58:37 | Just Perfect ( teaser) preview | hey this is only a preveiw of the story and i will have the finished up soon. -pwny |
| 2008-07-12 10:54:13 | Just Perfect ( teaser) preview | well i just sent it for validation last night so it should be up soon |