| 2012-08-09 10:17:35 |
My journey to Crete
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Yea...smart thing to post on a site like this "John and Beth"...on this site no one wants to hear about anyone's trips, ailments, and DEFINITELY not "god". If he "transforms" us into the "likeness of his son"...then Jesus must have been Hell on Wheels.. |
| 2012-08-09 10:19:07 |
My journey to Crete
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Also, i found your story used "rod" too much. Try using a variety of words. Shaft, cock, etc. No one likes hearing the same one over and over. But other than that..it was alright. |
| 2017-01-16 04:24:01 |
Playmate
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Not at all, I was very young and new at this. I always like any chance to improve my writing. |