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Comments from Blackdawn
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2010-07-13 17:31:18 | The Red Fang, Ch 1 Pt 1 | Looks good, need some work on your grammar though. |
| 2010-07-13 20:37:25 | Detention_(1) | OMG! This was an excellent read. I so loved it! You gotta write more shit like this! |
| 2010-07-18 23:43:52 | A Black Haired Lesbian a blond 15 yr Old and a Dog named Thunder | Very hot! I wanna read more of this! |
| 2010-07-28 21:53:35 | A Southern Gentleman | It was nice. Surely a story that gets right down to the point, there's no beating around the bush here. |
| 2010-08-03 07:59:14 | All-in-all there's not much wrong with this. Like what I gots to do with my stuff, proof read and grammar check. I noticed some flaws though, say for this part, "I was confused and asked what she meant, she told me I had to tell her who pussy tasted better and how much I loved her." - there's nothing wrong with that, but there's still a grammar mistake in their. But this - "Before long I was cumming, cumming, cumming, Hannah was happy and she screamed I love you sir which I knew all along I just wanted her to say it." Should have been like the other, a comma before the 'I lover you sir' part. It's nothing major, just some little flaws here and there. |