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Comments from LeahR
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2012-10-02 10:35:48 | Roomies_(0) | I gave the story a positive rating and I hope you will write more, BUT: 1. Writing in the past tense generally will make a more readable story, as "She ran to her room," rather than "She runs to her room." 2. There are many errors in capitalization, many of your sentences begin with a lower case letter. Also, the first word after a bit of dialogue should not be capitalized, unless it is a proper noun. ("No," he said. instead of "No," He says.) 3. Every paragraph (which can even be a single word) should be followed by a blank line. Your line feeds seem to be pretty much random, with several paragraphs with no separation, followed by random breaks sometimes of more than one line. Again, I hope you will write more. |
| 2012-11-20 04:43:24 | Mistress of the Moon | This is a great story. I have to go and read more of your stuff! I love this story! |
| 2012-12-13 09:39:00 | I Saw My Sister Stripping And It Turned Me On | Originally posted by Dark_Brother on July 30, 2011. |
| 2013-01-15 06:45:55 | My Sex Life 2 | Liking it. Well written. |
| 2013-01-26 06:43:50 | Finding her way. | Some very long sentences (a fault of my own stories too). Too many unecessary carriage returns spoil the formatting. Otherwise a sweet little story and I hope to read more about them. Yes, a very nice little story |