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Comments from Rutger5
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2011-08-02 18:42:28 | A Biker's Old Lady | Good story - has some truth to it. With respect. r5 |
| 2011-08-10 07:08:55 | Cousin Ashley Gets Her Own Story | Okay Thanks to all who read and especially for those who voted. Voting is now closed. Ride with Sam is the choice but let me see if I can please all. We shall see.Though not great number of reads the voting was enthusiastic for the number and I may do this again. r5 |
| 2011-09-05 09:26:19 | The Overlooked Girl | Overall a good story! I liked the general sweetness of the story and mood. I noticed you are young so there is plenty of time for improvement to your style. If you enjoy writing keep working at in and your stories will only get better. I'm giving it a positive vote. |
| 2011-09-27 11:32:33 | The Real Kate | A litte advice if you don't mind hearing it. Double space the breaks between paragraphs and it seemed each pagraph became longer as the story went on. Smaller paragraphs with each person's dialog seperate from each other and not in the body of paragraph makes the story easier to read. Story seems to be a little dry and if this is your true story you need to find a way to convey the passion and excitement you felt, it comes off a little matter of fact. I think you just started writing here so work at it to get better. The more you write the better you can get. r5 |
| 2011-10-13 13:52:10 | Katy's Late Night Project | You're welcome! I am kidding of course, but where I work there are a number of hispanic cleaning women, also some from south asia but their names are tougher. Sorry if you were offended but people also shouldn't be so thin skinned either.This is a work of fiction, plus I made the hispanic woman wise so that should mitigate your grievance. r5 |