| 2011-04-06 16:13:05 |
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The text is slightly stiff. I think that as I progress and begin to write more stories, it will become more natural. Also, Chyanne had just been filled with semen, and there would have been an obvious odor of sex, so Blake's mother would have been suspicious of what the two had been doing. |
| 2011-04-05 16:43:01 |
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Thanks. I left the end open for more. I may add part 2 if I have time. This short story alone took nearly a week. Let me get some more feedback on what people would like for the second section. |
| 2011-04-05 21:17:19 |
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Sorry, but I just had to point out that the last comment was written by me. I swear, I can't stay logged in for more than a minute. |