| 2011-06-24 06:21:54 |
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I love this kind of writing and that is how I wrote my Rachael series. A good story at the start feeds you the feeling of the moment. Awesome mate |
| 2011-06-24 06:41:58 |
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i LOVE the fact you are taking this slowly |
| 2011-07-23 10:39:55 |
My first Time_(74)
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basis of the story is OK apart from the grammar and then you get to cock sizes and then the reader loses interest because you lose reality when by pure coincidence, one guy has 9" and the other a 10" cock!!!!! GIVE THEM NORMAL COCKS, MAKE IT BELIEVABLE!!! |
| 2011-07-23 10:40:51 |
My first Time_(74)
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(that should read 9 inch and 10 inch) this software doesnt like my quote marks |
| 2011-08-04 11:05:58 |
Rachael's Story - Chapter 3 - Morning Showers
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Chapter 4 coming VERY VERY SOON |