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Comments from HolyerthAnthow
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| 2012-08-24 14:41:54 | A Game of Inches - Part Fourteen | Congratulations again Rhiannon for a wonderful chapter I do have a question to where this might head after reading the current real life news about Lance Armstrong though. Early in your story, you made mention of Bran Stevens using steroids when working out in his friend's gym while in high school and to a lesser extent in college....however, that topic kind of fell to the wayside, leaving the question of if he is still 'juicing' or if he went clean at some point. And as for the future of this story, clean now or not, is there a chance his past i going to come back and haunt him in a big and bad way? |
| 2012-11-07 20:57:50 | I normally dont critique the stories here since no one is reading these for Shakespearian diction. But that normally is due to normal spelling or grammatical errors being easily dismissed....only those with nothing better to do tend to give too much thought there. But when a story has the main character switching from first person to third person narrative, and being unable to make up his mind between Emily and Rachel (where the hell she suddenly appeared from, I dont know) as to who he is fucking..... I am left to guess the author of this story plagiarized it from some where and failed to properly edit it to make it seem his own. As such, despite a decent premise and an otherwise decent jack-off piece, I have to say the work sucks. |
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| 2012-11-11 20:23:48 | 'Anonymous reader 2012-11-09 03:46:41 you stole a paragraph from another story and copied it into yours. you did not even bother to change the name. jl317's Rachel - the baby sitter ring any bells?' Damn...I was right he plagiarized another author here... I just read the story you quoted, and johnsmith765 copied the sex scene from there almost verbatim here....only a name change from Jeff to James for the main character and a couple other losses from his cut-and-paste...and voila, Same story :P I would rather read a piss-poor story that was original than some bastardized copy-theft schlock because the author doesnt know how to write period. The bad grammar edits dont help....the original is SOOOOOOOOOOOOO much cleaner in its editing. Come up with something of your own or quit posting stories here. |
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| 2014-12-03 21:51:25 | Maid to Serve_(0) | Excellent story. It begs for a sequel ;) |