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Comments from lizardboy360
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2012-08-24 20:20:27 | Skulduggery Pleasant - Is that your razor or are you just happy to see me (revised) | im thinking of making a series where i will take suggestions of pairings and use them to make a story. please comment or send me a PM with your ideas the story will be mostly focused on valkyrie but there will be some with other characters i will not do man on man so dont bother asking sorry, female on female however yes. this series is mainly to strengthen my writing skill please comment on improvements i could make. without trying to sound morose i dont have many friends that ill be comfortable asking to proofread my stories so expect some mistakes im only human. LB |
| 2012-10-29 15:27:26 | for some reason the title is chapter two - fletchers present, i dont know if this is my mistake or something else, it is meant to be named Double Trouble | |
| 2017-01-19 22:58:23 | The Hidden World Of The Wizarding World, book:1 ch:1 discovering the hidden world | Good premise but its rushed, build it up more, read over it and make sure it sounds right, there are many mistakes such as "puss" rather than "pass", its little things like that that take people out of the mood. Add a bit more conflict between the pair, they have been rivals for years, and now suddenly they're fucking, it can happen but she barely resists, its hardly a seduction when she just says yes pretty much straight away. I would like to read more of this story but it definitely needs some polishing. Keep at it, PM me if you want a proof reader |
| 2017-06-24 16:32:13 | Harry Potter and the Curse of Seven - Chapter Two | Narutoisawesome - 1) I agree Naruto is awesome 2) Harry and Hermione will add on some girls to help Harry out 3) Things will get kinkier I just wanted to work up to it as both characters will be inexperienced to begin with 4) as for the mind control, Harry will start to use it more often I just don't want to fall into the trap of him forcing girls to have sex with him, it doesnt suit the character in my eyes, He will still be a good guy and if he suddenly starts bending people to his will for his own pleasure i feel like thats way off character. Thanks for the suggestions |