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Comments from Snackbar
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2015-12-25 02:22:02 | Manifest Destiny - Chapter 1: A scream in the dark_(1) | I totally see your points. As for line-spacing, I suppose breaking it up into more paragraphs could do the trick. Character development? Yep. You're absolutely right. I wanted to start the story off right away, but I knew after I had written the story that I had fucked up. Thanks for the feedback! |
| 2015-12-25 10:05:45 | Manifest Destiny - Chapter 1: A scream in the dark_(1) | Im gonna revise this story. Imma leave it up for now while I work on a revision. |
| 2016-01-06 03:35:06 | Manifest Destiny - Chapter 1 | To infinity, and beyond! I hope atleast. |