| 2017-04-20 11:05:52 |
Massaging my Best Friend_(0)
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I don't know if you've honed your skills by writing stories in other places but I think that this story was very well written and better than a lot of what gets posted here. I personally would I would very much enjoy reading more stories from you so keep them coming.... |
| 2017-05-07 13:26:01 |
Daniel Wolf (reedited) Part 5
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Do you ever relate how he crossed over to the fantasy world? |
| 2017-07-26 07:12:19 |
Meeting Ivory and our first encounter_(1)
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I realize that this is your first time writing here but proof read your story before you hit send, it will keep you from sounding like your still in grade school and that you're using words that you overheard your mommy and daddy using when you were supposed to be in bed and you don't know how to spell them correctly or use them in the right context. It also helps make the story more believable when you actually slow it down and fill in the scenery so the reader can picture what you're writing about.... better luck with your next story or actually rewrite this one by filling in the details and proof reading it for example "you rubbed her clit" not her "clip" unless of course you have a weird hair accessories fetish and if so then my apologies..... |
| 2017-09-30 06:11:08 |
THE AD_(1)
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You start the story out saying she came over to your place and end the story with you leaving a note that said that you had to go home to your wife get your story straight..... |
| 2018-02-20 14:15:43 |
A new king on the throne
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Learn how to spell check and use proper grammar so that your story is understandable... |