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Comments from fbailey
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-08-23 04:02:56 | my submissive wife 2 | Two stories are NOT enough. Please write more. |
| 2008-08-29 20:16:27 | Camping cousins part 1 | You need a space after a comma. You need to capitalize the letter I. You could use a space between paragraphs too. Also instead of posting a dozen two-page stories how about you just post it all at once. Sorry but you asked. |
| 2008-08-30 12:44:59 | The New Neighbour_(1) | You really need to use a spell checker and then you need to proofread your work before submitting it. The letter i needs to be capitalized. You need to use apostrophes. And as everyone else has told you, you need to use paragraphs too. What I did read was okay but I had to stop because it was just too hard to ignore all the little stuff. Better luck next time. |
| 2008-08-31 12:21:35 | i love camping | she cried "finger my ass as u eat me out pleasee" so i plunged onefinger into her ussy to lube int u and licked her asshole to lube it. i then asked "u ready" +++++ That was some of the worst written English that I have ever seen. You did a fairly good job with the story but…your spelling, punctuation, and capitalization certainly need a whole lot of work. You need to stop ‘text messaging’ and spell the words out. You also need to take the time to proofread and fine-tune your story before submitting it. Better luck with your next story. |
| 2008-08-31 12:46:37 | The Phone Call_(0) | Excellent…absolutely excellent. I read it to my wife and we both loved it. I just criticized MMMMKAY for his atrocious writing of “I Love Camping”…so therefore I feel that I must compliment you on your writing capabilities. I love your work keep it up. |