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Comments from amorousfucker
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2017-10-23 02:14:51 | Emergency Accomodations_(1) | It's rare that erotica can have a solid plot while still making the reader hot at each love scene, but you certainly achieved that goal exceedingly well. 10/10 |
| 2017-10-24 03:57:54 | A Happy End to High School; Part 3 | There are more chapters that I've not yet read, but I wanted to leave a comment at this point: it's a good story, and the potential for more is definitely there, but you need to brush up on your grammar. And when you say "half ten," I presume you mean half PAST ten, but that isn't particularly clear. Also, as another post said, take a little more time telling the story, allowing for more buildup before the climax, if you will. That said, it IS still a great story you've got going, so definitely keep writing! |
| 2017-10-24 18:19:15 | A Happy End to High School; Part 4 | Really need to work on changing tenses while writing. It gets confusing. Glad to see him fuck Hailey, though! |
| 2018-02-26 17:20:15 | My Daughter 6 | This is regarding all chapters thus far: slow set up, but solid job of weaving a story out of the start. I really enjoyed him taking his daughter's virginity, the change up of flipping to his wife seducing their son, and then the crescendo of male/male contact. It grows tiresome the way male bisexuality is treated as compared to female bisexuality, so this was especially pleasing to me, particularly that it wasn't made into a romantic thing, but more just kinky. Bravo! |
| 2018-05-10 04:56:05 | Gold Digger Rescue | A hot sex story with an interesting twist in the plot is always desirable for those of us who enjoy erotic literature. Don't worry about any grammatical mistakes, because I didn't notice many, and I tend to see them all. The only thing I felt it was lacking was to have Chris cum inside Sandy, with the potential for him to knock her up with a boy that Barney could present to his mother as his own. Probably wouldn't work for him to be oblivious to this fact, as it seems he will end up living with his daughter. Another twist to consider would be for Bekah to fuck her father and be unsatisfied, longing for Chris's big dick. Could probably even turn Barney into the ultimate cuckold, with both his wife and his daughter longing for Chris. Just a few thoughts about how you could continue this story, but in any case, you SHOULD continue. There's too much potential here not to do so. |