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Comments from jonialabaster
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2019-10-03 13:51:18 | Jenny is Full of Secrets | I don’t have time now, but I look forward to reading the follow ups. Well done on the unfolding, I was definitely expecting her to be wearing a strap on, not to actually have a dick. I could almost smell Jenny’s sweet candy perfume |
| 2019-10-15 14:17:03 | Seduced by the sex offender, becoming her sex slave | It’s a fun read, has a lot of potential. A little too much direct language, “she said do this. So I did this.” Etc. indirect writing lets the reader imagine the story unfolding more vividly. Otherwise it’s great! |
| 2019-10-31 23:30:06 | MY MAN’S FIRST BISEXUAL EXPERIENCE. | Nice story. Though I think a bit less direct language. Paint the picture a bit more. But I love the material. Idyllic |
| 2019-11-03 15:27:22 | The Making of a Sissy Boy Slut - The Prequel | A dream come true if I ever had one! |
| 2020-01-07 17:29:36 | How my family joined as one! Part 1_(0) | I enjoyed it. I’d say if you’re going be to have dialogue and you’re going to label who is saying what do it like Kim: says a thing. Me: says a thing etc... Or else, “a thing being spoken,” Kim said to me or I exclaimed, etc... Just some feedback. Otherwise good story, watch the grammar. Finger in the hurt is a nice touch |