| 2018-08-18 09:37:47 |
After Practice_(1)
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I really liked it, you didn't draw it out to much but that being said I think things progressed a bit too quickly, a few more details about them both and what they were doing would be good. Keep writing, this was fab and I was dead hard reading it. |
| 2018-08-18 09:40:18 |
No Backup Plan
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Write part two! This was a great and unique story, I really wanna see where it goes. Horefully they release his cock so he can get some action though poor fella |
| 2018-12-23 12:36:33 |
My First Sexual Experience_(5)
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Very far fetched, needs a bit more plot and details but for a horny quick read it was fine |
| 2019-03-18 01:45:41 |
Nervous Wreck
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Great story and great sex, you're amazing at relating her experience and feelings to us. I'd recommend you proof read it before publishing as there were a few typos and I think you need to widen your vocab a bit but I'm looking forward to part 2! |
| 2019-04-17 08:02:29 |
Rileys first DP experience
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It's a little rushed and you me to write in paragraphs but it's a fucking hot story, just wish you had taken your time a bit more telling it. And them suddenly cashing her slut was a bit random |