| 2013-06-30 20:22:38 |
owned by step-daughter part two
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Hey paintballer016, hit me up. |
| 2013-06-30 20:22:40 |
owned by step-daughter part two
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Hey paintballer016, hit me up. |
| 2013-06-30 20:22:41 |
owned by step-daughter part two
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Hey paintballer016, hit me up. |
| 2013-07-01 13:33:51 |
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I read your story and have no problem with the subject matter, but since you sell some of your other " works" I felt compelled to comment. Your writing is a bit flat and pretentious which is fine when all you waste is a little bit of time reading, but I feel sorry for anyone investing funds into your stories because I have read much better stories on here. |
| 2013-07-01 22:57:46 |
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Dear author, thank you for addressing my comment. I apologize if I was harsh earlier but this genre and its writers have left me disappointed. Perhaps it is that porn in itself is by its nature on an obvious path and lacks or simply has no need for well developed characters or plot as the point is to simply get to the same variance of action that occurs in every single story. While trying on different authors I have consistently felt I was at the the mercy of one person using the same buzz words in every literary creation like a the beauty pageant contestant who has been told she was pretty one to many times in life and ceased the action of thinking for herself. Please understand, this is not a further jab at you, I am just left with the feeling through my experience that is you have read one, you have read them all. Of course I speak only as someone who thought herself to be a fan in what looked entertaining from afar. |