| 2017-07-14 03:30:21 |
It's Like Candy
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Creative, if diabolical, story. You are one sick fuck. Congratulations. |
| 2017-08-28 21:46:04 |
Good Girl to Slut_(0)
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I agree with others that it's a good story, but too short. You just say, you're a good girl. Well, say more about life in the straight and narrow, set up the contrast more, as well as the motivation to be a slut for the night. Then, a little more description, not just what you were wearing, but how about your make up too? Then draw out the seduction more, and the sex. |
| 2017-08-28 21:47:55 |
Shoe Shopping_(0)
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Delightful. It would be interesting to tell the same story from the salesman's perspective. (Even better to film it.) |
| 2017-08-28 21:52:56 |
Tell Me About Your Wife_(0)
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You nailed this one. Your best story. Very sexy, clear point of view. You are writing this one with the same confidence as your main character. |
| 2017-08-28 21:57:14 |
Tell Me About Your Wife - Part Two
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Very satisfying. |