| 2015-11-08 01:34:57 |
Romantic Night of Camping
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Great attention to pain, but everything else was a waste. Nothing was realistic. I understand that you want to experience being ripped apart and eaten. But your choice of situations was absurd. The girl would be dead within 10 seconds of first serious leg wound. |
| 2015-11-08 01:54:04 |
Eat Me
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Once again, it was to rushed. You have the talent to be better. But I wonder if you have the drive. |
| 2015-11-08 02:37:32 |
Kidnapped With Friends
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This is a definite improvement. Not nearly as rushed as your earlier work. And I love that she survived long enough to serve her flesh to everyone. (Not at all realistic, but there is a time and place to do away with reality and this was it.) Good Job! |
| 2015-11-15 00:57:43 |
Having Anna for Dinner
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This story was a waste of time. It served only to advertise your incompetence, lack of talent and laziness. The plot was ridiculous. You were either to intoxicated to write or you have an absurdly poor grasp on reality. In either case, your attention to spelling, grammar and even character names was pitiful. |