| 2017-05-17 03:52:29 |
RUNNING into TROUBLE
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Oh fuck. Now what? That was my final reaction after reading the end. Great story. Great pacing. Great prose. Excellent writing. Keep up the good work. I suppose this wont be having a part two. But if you do plan to write it, i'll be sure to read it. |
| 2017-05-23 14:08:02 |
Cherished Girl
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Nicely written. Very vivid story telling. I think you should write a book. Patrons of this site may not actually appreciate your work. This story is clearly intended for female readers with forced seduction fetish. Something akin to works like 'Seduced in the dark by CL James', 'Monster in the Dark by Pepper Winters' or 'Consequences by Aleatha Roemig. '. If u havent read them yet, which i doubt that, you should take a look at those |
| 2017-05-23 15:01:58 |
Captured Couples 2
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Your writing skill is really good. And i enjoy reading your work. But still, do remember that readers have a conscience and would want to see Ashley and Jake receive retribution. If you can end this short series with a police bust that ended the two twisted fucks in body bags, that would be deliciously wonderful. An epilogue of Dominic, Miranda and Caela coming to terms with what happened and each of them found solace in their own way would be even better. I can guarantee you that the ratings will be higher if those two societal wastes are six feet underground. Just my opinions. But I understand why you stop there as i do write sick stories like these and can relate to that orgasm inducing feeling of writing an ending that insinuate continued sick fuckery. Anyways, keep writing. |
| 2017-06-30 04:44:57 |
Grandma's Secret
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Holy crap. This is just...wow. so much sex wrapped into one giant plot twist. This is one of the most exhilarating stories i've ever read. You didn't drag the stories nor did you rush. The pace was just nice. You style of writing is great and there's no abrupt stops that one usually found in amatuer stories. The storyline was very 'buttery' just like Audrey's pussy, I suppose. Storytelling is vivid and deliciously described. Great work. |
| 2017-06-29 01:11:40 |
The Slaver's Retaliation
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Hi, Mature Gina. Thank you for your comment. I do agree with you that calling a female a cunt is in itself the highest form of degradation. But still, I don't see what other words I can use that has the same effect. I want the main character to deliver across the greatest degree of humiliation onto the girls as a way to contrast the power dynamics. Only then will it sounds real. Hard to imagine a sex trader being all feminist and PC about his subjects and not try to hurt their pride. ;p |