| 2017-12-04 16:40:43 |
The Blind Girl in the Rain: part 3
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An incredibly written love story with just the right amount of sex. Please write more. You are a very gifted writer. Thank you for your submission. |
| 2017-12-26 14:40:42 |
My Life. Ch. 7...
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Thank you for a great well written story. If you ever decide to update this chapter I have a suggestion which I feel would make it more erotic. When Adam discovers Shelby being fucked by her brothers he takes out his anger about Danielle by having Shelby get on her knees on the bed like she was with her brothers. Instead of on her knees have Adam recognize her talents as a cheerleader and how limber she is by having her grab her ankles then plowing her pussy before he moves her to the bed to take her anal cherry. Just a thought, I am really enjoying your story. |
| 2017-12-26 14:40:53 |
My Life. Ch. 7...
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Thank you for a great well written story. If you ever decide to update this chapter I have a suggestion which I feel would make it more erotic. When Adam discovers Shelby being fucked by her brothers he takes out his anger about Danielle by having Shelby get on her knees on the bed like she was with her brothers. Instead of on her knees have Adam recognize her talents as a cheerleader and how limber she is by having her grab her ankles then plowing her pussy before he moves her to the bed to take her anal cherry. Just a thought, I am really enjoying your story. |