| 2021-02-08 00:28:29 |
My Youngest Nubile Daughter Part 1
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So I enjoyed the story until you brought Lilly, a prepubescent girl into the mix. This killed the story. While you may not have given her exact age, it is evident she is 8 - 13 years old. |
| 2021-02-03 14:28:43 |
An Incest Birthday- The Final Chapter Part 1_(1)
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I have no fucking words! While Nivek_88 was not a great editor, I loved the storyline and concept of this story; a true love story. I hate when writers fail to finish a story. I don't know what happened to Nivek_88, he hasn't been here since 2017. Anyway, for the fans of this story, I will fully edit and repost sometime in 2021 with an ending that does it justice. I am in the middle of my own story "How Polygamy Begins". Once I complete it early this year, I will finish this story for Nivek. Providing, he doesn't contact me and tell me not too. See my stories written under James_Gina |
| 2021-03-05 03:39:17 |
Summer Fun - Chapter 4 – Private Party
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Well done, it was an excellent story. This was a good ending, but I would really love some more. Do Kyle and Renee end up together, Does Kyle come into his own Senior year and dates Tiffany? Does all the hard work equal a cool car, college at the same University as Renee? I also notice your writing is improving, so keep it up. |
| 2021-03-04 14:47:07 |
Summer Fun – Chapter 2 – One Thing on My Mind
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Excellent story, watch your verb tense. You switch back and forth between past and present tense. Be sure to stay in the verb tense of the story. |
| 2021-03-04 14:52:26 |
Summer Fun – Chapter 3 – Bartlett Farms
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Excellent story, I hope you keep writing! Having been a shy guy at that age, the story is relatable and fun. Can't wait to see where it goes. |