| 2011-12-04 22:52:47 |
Singing Jasen's Song: Part 4
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Beautiful work, SS. It's good to see the walls starting to break down. Jasen needs a good mixup of some kind for his character to develop further as well. I can't wait to see the next chapter. |
| 2011-12-05 11:37:19 |
Meet at the lake
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Thanks for the comments! I am glad you enjoyed the story! |
| 2011-12-12 15:29:17 |
Meet at the lake
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Thanks for the comments everyone. If I told you if she got pregnant that wouldn't keep you in suspence for a new story, would it? The person that commented about adding more details, I thought it was pretty clear about her pussy. The things you mentioned I didn't add, I did so with a purpose. I wanted their first experience to be off-camera for now. I may write about it in a flashback in the future. And her breast size I left out for a more general reason. To make it more accessible to more people. The details you leave open allow people to visualize whatever pleases them best. So for some, Rose will be a D or DD cup, others will prefer to imagine her as an A, B or even C. I may nail it down more precisely if I see a need in a future story. The people who have voted negatively, I would love to hear why you didn't like it. What about it caused you to vote negatively? Anything that can help me improve is great, although I know all my stories won't appeal to everyone. |
| 2011-12-12 16:14:33 |
Phoenix ch 01
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Great story. Excellent work with the details and very hot sex! Well done! |
| 2012-01-01 15:26:00 |
Singing Jasen's Song: Part 5
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Excellent SS. Glad you are back. My only quibble is the formatting of the songs. Some of them don't stand out so it's difficult to imagine them if you have never heard of them. The ones that are interlaced with the movements of the characters are easier though. Looking forward to the next chapter! |