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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2016-04-08 08:12:55 | VIRUS SURGE: Jake's Log. | 22 hours and 345 reads nice. Retired Army NCO: as to the question of the other two female experiments. How I have designed this lovely genetic tampering facility greatly affects the location to each subjects living quarters, the more dangerous ones are in the lowest levels while the more tame and/or obedient ones are higher up. and while i did not go into detail about the others' lives, nor have I much of a plan to do so right now... I might later but we'll see. anyway, Since jake was only allowed clearance to Aura's level and higher he was unable to get access to the other two. and with his plan he only needed and had time for Aura's level and above. I might have the other two in the main story later, or might just give them a side note explaining their fates. Also first comment guy WTF? |
| 2016-04-10 08:31:04 | Eternal Darkness: Chapter Six | missing chapter seven dude |
| 2016-04-12 06:04:19 | Tales of Kairndal Part 1: Act 2 | A siren. the bird type not the mermaid one. could give you a list of all the Fae races |
| 2016-05-13 06:33:41 | Home alone with Alyssa, part 7 | ok so read all that and I have to say man... stop fucking rushing your work!!! yes its a good story and you did a decent job writing however the constant errors with words such a Theirs instead of there's also tuff??? its spelled Tough. please find a different writing tool, one that will make your work a little better. also what is with all the "huh"s?? are you using it for a sigh or just a filler for lack of a word? you do have skill I admit that. However, you need to take your time proofreading and editing your stories. now I know this might sound like I'm being a dick, and maybe I am but please slow it down. think of writing like foreplay you start slow and tease before going into the down and dirty stuff. also be best if you separated the speech of characters by moving them into another paragraph. in closing you have potential and it needs to be refined. good luck with your other works, and I hope to see you improve. |
| 2017-08-29 02:10:21 | The Prophecy Ch. 6 | Another good post, however there were several grammar and spelling issues but we all do the same. I would suggest you find someone to help you edit your work seeing as there were also a few sentences that were missing or had doubled words. All in all though a good job and will be waiting for chapter 7 |