| 2011-02-26 17:39:42 |
Disaster at Antonio's
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I liked it. You have a unique way with words. Things are stated as they are and not as they might be. Everything...falls as it may, and rightly so. Very good story. |
| 2011-03-05 18:19:29 |
Moms Dark Room
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You created a new dimension (at least new to me) explaining what each person is thinking because the two of them were in the dark and understandably wouldn't have seen anything for themselves. Good job blueheatt |
| 2011-03-07 16:23:20 |
Memoirs
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Well written. It doesn't deserve the low rating it has received. Good job malummens. |
| 2011-03-07 16:26:48 |
Let yourself go
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Good first effort. I have to stress the importance of paragraph spacing. Keep writing and I'm sure you'll improve. |
| 2011-03-07 16:35:46 |
Disaster at Antonio's
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Fuck the complainers ssalo. Great story. Damn the consequences and space each paragraph as much as you want. I don't think it took away from the story. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. |