| 2010-06-30 12:39:53 |
Teasing Daddy's Friend Until He Can't Take Anymore
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Good, fun read. Well written, although one passage referred to her as teasing him for months when it was only a couple weeks. That's cool, though. Would love more in this series, her taking it up the ass, him cumming in her pussy, you get the point. |
| 2010-06-30 16:28:23 |
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Sweet piece of writing. Good job, kept me interested during the entire story. Take this into many chapters, please. |
| 2010-07-15 09:13:42 |
Bound and Raped: The First Night
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Good story, good writing, would love to read more. However, as a critique think about separating your paragraphs. It would make it way easier to read and follow along with the transitions. |
| 2010-07-15 19:48:22 |
And The Dog Made Three PT1
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You did a great job of plagarizing this from the same book in the Pet Book Series, authored by David Crane and published in August of 1986. So - tell me, why are you trying to pass this off as your own work? |
| 2010-07-15 19:48:45 |
And The Dog Made Three PT2
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You did a great job of plagarizing this from the same book in the Pet Book Series, authored by David Crane and published in August of 1986. So - tell me, why are you trying to pass this off as your own work? |