| 2013-11-23 19:43:06 |
Welcome Home_(3)
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I thought it was a fantastic story the way it was written. Don't change a thing, but have them go wild with loving sex. I too look forward to the next romantic chapter. Good job jdm320. |
| 2013-11-29 01:31:35 |
Can We Survive I
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This does seem to be easily within the realm of possibility in this country. I hope there is a part two. Along with lots of fucking I hope there is a lot of UN and other bad guy killing. |
| 2013-11-29 08:49:51 |
First my mother part 2
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The only thing I found reasonably accurte was your 14-year-old age. I suggest you stay in school and pay particular in your English classes. |
| 2013-11-30 07:28:13 |
How I lost my virginity_(4)
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Not bad at all for a first effort. Perhaps your next try should include his eating her as a preliminary to fucking. Also please add some detail to the sex. Read some of the better stuff on here and keep at it. You have mde a good start. Ignore the harsh critics. Most likely they have never written a thing and only want to bitch. |
| 2013-12-01 18:39:18 |
Divine Justice II: The Gift
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I agree with the previous commentor. This story needs to have at least one more chapter, if not several more. The revenge Terry takes on his family should be very interesting. |