| 2014-10-03 15:16:21 |
Controlling My Daughter
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Not a bad story, but it needs to be much longer. Perhaps the next time you can go into some details regarding the sex acts. Try not to just jump into the hypnosis and sex. Build a story around your characters. Tell us the results pertaining to the daughter's new found sexuality. Does she get knocked up? If so, how does that affect her. |
| 2014-10-31 04:25:12 |
Learning the art of Kidnap and rape part two
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I hope there will be more. |
| 2014-10-16 02:17:37 |
The Hunger_(0)
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Well worth the read. Even though this is an older story. I still enjoyed it. |
| 2014-12-25 18:39:24 |
Daddy's Girl_(4)
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The previous comments are valid, but my concern was with the run-on sentences. Other than that, you have written a very hot story. I hope there is more to cum. Perhaps Hayley can invite some of her young or even virginal friends to join the party. |
| 2014-12-26 18:23:47 |
Allison's Dark Adventure (pt2)
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I look forward to more of this story. I hope you are not one of these authors that don't finish what you start. |