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Comments from RuleZero
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2011-01-01 16:22:59 | My Crazy Mom and Aunt | Needs to be proofread a lot more, too many spelling mistakes. Also, try to separate the paragraphs more, this is mostly a wall of text now. Especially during dialogs! Lastly, the psychology of the characters are too easy and one-sided, try to develop the characters more because at the moment it looks like they're all permanently drunk all the time. |
| 2011-01-01 16:23:22 | My Crazy Mom and Aunt | Needs to be proofread a lot more, too many spelling mistakes. Also, try to separate the paragraphs more, this is mostly a wall of text now. Especially during dialogs! Lastly, the psychology of the characters are too easy and one-sided, try to develop the characters more because at the moment it looks like they're all permanently drunk all the time. |
| 2011-02-28 09:54:50 | listen to your hushand | Try not to abuse the spell checker next time. Lots of words in your story don't make sense in context even though they're spelled correctly. Proofread, mkay? |
| 2011-03-17 18:05:15 | Connie's Male Rape Desire | The parentheses are kind of stupid, sorry. Also, try to realize the difference between your and you're, body's and bodies, and several other mistakes in homophones. Nevertheless, a good try. |
| 2011-03-27 11:27:29 | My wife and her Bosses | Please to learn english writing, yes? |