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Comments from RuleZero
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2014-04-06 14:43:57 | Charles seduced by Sarah (Part 1) | Could do better. Less self-involved narration for one. It smells of neck-bearded silly notions of what sex is and who it belongs to. In other words, juvenile. |
| 2015-01-01 16:40:11 | Cherry(chapter 1) | Oh wow, a mid-twenties protagonist who's "really nice guy but maybe too nice", even though he thinks spending money on drinks and gas to meet up with women who won't immediately fulfill him in every way is a total waste, but no, really, he's really cool and has his life figured out and totally not a gary stu manifestation of the author. AND he finds this really devoted slutty-but-totally-not-slutty cheerleader bombshell who I'm willing to bet is going to turn out to be a high schooler because those are the best, right, those sluts who haven't been used and defiled yet by other men, right? AND she immediately recognizes he's so SPECIAL that she basically becomes a crutch for the protagonist to give his life meaning and vice versa because THAT'S WHAT LOVE IS, AMIRIGHT? I mean WOW this story is so interesting and imaginative I can only wonder where it's going to go from here oh no never mind I can literally narrate this in my sleep well done "author" jesus christ learn to write dude. |
| 2015-01-04 17:33:54 | Cherry(chapter 1) | Lol, I knew someone like you wouldn't be able to resist replying to my comment. I'm sure I wounded you deeply. However, it's the defense of the truly witless to say "I don't see you do it, so you can't criticize MY work." Just because I don't write my own porn doesn't mean I can't see what's good and what's shite. And mate, your stuff is shite. |