| 2010-12-25 13:31:17 |
The rise and fall of a boy called Rave part 4
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The relationship between Rave and Faye is great, their lovemaking was romantic and so SEXY, really turned me on! I'm glad he's no longer with Bex, she was so painful. From the way it is written, it sounds like a true story. Your description of characters and events are very clear so vivid and so real, I have feelings for each character. I love that you write in "real speak", so natural. It seems to be in a locale outside of America. But, in nature so like any of our poor and criminal neighborhoods of which I am familiar but did not growup in. This story is highly interesting, exciting! You are a very good writer! I don't mind the misspelled words, etc., it is natural to the idiom of this story and adds to my belief that it is a "true story". |
| 2010-12-25 13:33:24 |
The rise and fall of a boy called Rave part 4
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The relationship between Rave and Faye is great, their lovemaking was romantic and so SEXY, really turned me on! I'm glad he's no longer with Bex, she was so painful. From the way it is written, it sounds like a true story. Your description of characters and events are very clear so vivid and so real, I have feelings for each character. I love that you write in "real speak", so natural. It seems to be in a locale outside of America. But, in nature so like any of our poor and criminal neighborhoods of which I am familiar but did not growup in. This story is highly interesting, exciting! You are a very good writer! I don't mind the misspelled words, etc., it is natural to the idiom of this story and adds to my belief that it is a "true story". |
| 2010-12-25 13:49:01 |
The rise and fall of a boy called Rave part 4
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The relationship between Rave and Faye is great, their lovemaking was romantic, so SEXY! I'm glad he's no longer with Bex, she was so painful. Your description of characters and events are very clear so vivid and so real, I have feelings for each character. I love that you write in "real speak", so natural, adds to my belief that it is a "true story". It seems to be in a locale outside of America. But, in nature so like some of our poor and criminal neighborhoods. This story is highly interesting, exciting! You are a very good writer! I don't mind the misspelled words, etc., it is natural within the idiom of this story. |
| 2010-12-25 13:57:22 |
The rise and fall of a boy called Rave part 2
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I liked Rave taking Bex on a real date, I think it made this butch psychotic feel like a girl again and their sex was HOT! Also, liked Faye's listening through the thin walls, that was cute and funny. |
| 2010-12-25 14:02:26 |
The rise and fall of a boy called Rave part 2
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I liked Rave taking Bex on a real date, I think it made this butch-psychotic feel like a real girl again and their sex was HOT! Also, liked Faye's listening through the thin walls, that was cute and funny. |