| 2013-03-26 01:54:42 |
A former student
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Completely unreadable. Use paragraphs. |
| 2014-12-11 07:29:20 |
Horny Hermione - Greyback's Bitch *Reposted*
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Much better. I don't see any glaring errors this time that would distract from the story. In future you might try being a bit more descriptive in the narrative. |
| 2017-01-02 17:02:20 |
my LBFM
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I visited Subic many times during my Navy years, and the LBFM is the greatest of God's inventions. |
| 2017-07-09 06:28:39 |
Drugged and raped at a party_(1)
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Absolute garbage. If this is representative of what you think to be a quality story, please don't upload more. |
| 2018-04-29 21:50:36 |
Down on the farm_(2)
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The correct term is "SeaBee," not "CB." |