| 2011-06-11 01:36:08 |
Daddy cums home after work
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Well, chapter one was OK, now what? |
| 2011-06-11 02:13:07 |
Little Cindy's Texas Adventure
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great story, beast ending was a tad over the top. |
| 2011-12-03 01:04:37 |
A Family Cruise 1
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good, but just way too much. the formatting tough too. good stuff, keep writing, just try not to overwhelm us |
| 2012-01-23 00:17:48 |
Absolute Power 1
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Good story, but you need to credit the original author and not try to pass it off as your own. |
| 2013-08-25 21:45:13 |
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You've completely lost any narrative thread you had from the earlier stories. Quit taking stupid dares and get back to trying to create a story. |